Wanting to die.

To whom it may concern;

There is nonhing left for me now

The end of brio shall come some how

I dream of peace merely in that location is none

The dream shall end my spiritedness is done

I wish to rest ever more

Six feet down in demons lore

A sleepless state of dreamless wake

On deathbeds remain my funeral make

It shall be done just as I say

I shall be free I find a way

I slit my throat for you care

You cannot know the pain I bare

As the dawn, break just finished the gate

They shall see my bloody fate

Suicide the only way

For me to live and love my way

But I shall leave this note to you

For you can not know what I have been through

Please Dont be mad it has to be

Cant live like this moreover you shall see

So now I go and please dont cry

There is nothing left

I indispensableness TO DIE

when i was proveing your poem, my heart skipped a few beats. i have usher new(prenominal) poems that you have raiseted to cheathouse (which were all brilliant) but this one is by cold the best. it is so touching, i had separate coming to my eyes when i was done reading it...

This was very good, however, I hope this is not your true haveings. What seems dark today, leave alone be enlightend 2mrwo.

I read Hobas comment but since I havnt read much poetry I cant validate it. This is by far your best poem submitted. It is very touching. This makes is quality work.

I have read something equal to this before. I think that you have taken somebody elses poem and changed a few words and lines to make it your own...which would exempt why it doesnt make sense in some places.

Pacojaleb wrote:


My forget is mine and it just burns me to think you would think i could take credit for some thing i did not frame.



I have a very hard life with a few breif moments of sanity to cope with reality. maybe if you took the cadence to thourghly read them you might see the deepth that was put in to them. i have some of my close up published in other places on the web under other names PAYNE ,HIPPIECHICK, Mandy, I guess that all i have to say


From Hoba

I havent seen it on the net. I said a couple of your lines were very similar to some poets I studied in poetry papers at University. I cant remember their names at the moment. I know the whole thing is not copied because the fact english is your second language shows in your poetry. And if you honestly feel what you are writing....wise up......what would that achieve?????? Write poetry on a topic that hasnt been covered as much...there is so much self-annihilation poetry out there it becomes boring. Go and select a topic on something completely different, something unusual, write a poem, submit it and im sure it would be so much better. You have the skills to write good poetry, i just dont think that you are arrival your integral potential......you are capable of writing better stuff than this. I have given it an average :| ill bear the smileys for your better work to come.

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